WORKING THESIS: Fleda Brown’s poem “Highway 5,” and Tony Hoagland’s “Candlelight” demonstrate the notion that human nature allows only so much consideration of options.  In both poems, the speakers freely choose to disregard consequences even though they are aware of them; in Hoagland’s writing, the choice to disregard may have disastrous consequences while Brown’s speaker enjoys an almost magical transformation as a result.


ü     definitely debatable; is not a weak thesis (isn't overly broad, doesn't restate conventional wisdom, isn't based on personal conviction, etc.) 

ü     thesis (as is) obligates the essay to accomplish the following:



1.)  show how the texts show consideration of options (but only to a degree)

Ex.  choosing the dinner and the straight route for seemingly good reasons (lines _________)


2.)  show how the texts show speakers disregarding consequences

Ex. “knowing what we’re missing”

Ex. “. . . in this world/ you have to decide what/ you’re willing to kill

Ex. crushing ants




3.)  show how Hoagland’s text shows long-term and terrible byproducts

Ex. ants (? fits topic idea?)

Ex. rain forest

Ex. ozone destruction

Ex. skin cancer

Ex. elephant tusks

Ex. fact that some of these connect and are chain reactions.


4.)  show how Brown’s text shows a transformation as a result, and maybe despite, the attempt to take the “straight” route

Ex. “what [they’re] missing” is actually present

Ex. tone/diction: “aria,” “light as light”

Ex. casting off inner problems –“personal will, petty prejudices”

Ex. casting off “this difficult language”



Still needs: EVOLUTION (make sure nothing is going to damage the argument or interfere with it)

SO WHAT? (significance of argument)

Once these are taken care of, I can shape these examples and topics into paragraphs.